Please construct a meaningful argument or point of view, including a clear thesis, paragraphs with relevant supporting points, adequate evidence to substantiate claims, and alternate viewpoints with appropriate counterarguments.

I have actually completed the paper but my professor has told me to correct lot of things. I want help in rewriting the paper with the corrections that 2 of my professors have marked. I have used lot of sources which you can cut down to just 2. Please construct a meaningful argument or point of view, including a clear thesis, paragraphs with relevant supporting points, adequate evidence to substantiate claims, and alternate viewpoints with appropriate counterarguments. Thats what the final objective of paper should be. Please help edit and rewrite the essay to get me an A+ for it. I will attach my essay and corrections from 2 of my professors. GIve me your best. Thanks